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Post by Brutal Mirror on Jul 11, 2011 19:08:08 GMT -5
Hello all is there any chance i can get some feed back on my posts please.
are they good enough or is there things i should be working on to make them better thanks to all that replies.
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Post by Trash on Jul 11, 2011 20:35:53 GMT -5
Hello all is there any chance i can get some feed back on my posts please. are they good enough or is there things i should be working on to make them better thanks to all that replies. They are VERY good. I loved your prematch in our card match, very entertaining and gives a great sense of your character. I dont really have any suggestions other then liking what I read from you. Your character is a breath of fresh air...
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Post by johnmwhite on Jul 11, 2011 20:39:58 GMT -5
I have been impressed with your posts. You also built up a heck of a win streak from your debut until this past Wrath, and you lost by a really narrow margin. You could stand to be a little more careful with spelling but that isn't a huge deal. I had a quick look back at some of your matches and it seems your streak was kind of overlooked since you were always in the midcard, so maybe with a Holiday-shaped hole in the main event you'll be able to start stepping up and take advantage.
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Post by Brutal Mirror on Jul 11, 2011 22:30:28 GMT -5
Thank you both I'll try and keep a close eye on the spelling.
Trash it was good playing off of you. your work on posts is amazing I'm happy my first loss was to you thank you for a good match.
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Post by The Outlaw on Jul 12, 2011 8:24:00 GMT -5
I still have yet to read your last match in its entirety due to some of the reasons why I'm leaving but rest assured I respect quality and I will get around to it.
You are the only "New" wrestler that has actually came in and silently impressed me, you were gentle with your posting style and by that I don't mean the content but the way you conduct yourself. I have thought it to be a shame that you of all people never got a shot at my title or even a "Demo" match with me if you will when I had to face opponents with a skill level below yours. I say skill instead of talent firmly because you still haven't fully developed your talent....which is a big difference I'd be happy to explain in my words.
Talent is something you bring to the table, its something required with time that makes you unique to this game and a superb player. For example...Trash has his way with words, he always finds something DEEP to talk about with every opponent to hype and sell them and their match and in turn it sells the character of Trash. JMW has a way of words to trap you, make you think and force you to try to outsmart him which I assure you can be extremely hard to do....
Skill....there is but a few needed to play and master this game and that is the ability to take constructive criticism, learn from it and your mistakes and have the "Want" to push yourself further and take the time to approve. By starting this thread you've obviously demonstrated you can do that.
Lastly on a deeper level of how I think you can better yourself....Spelling and correct use of words. This is a game where physical actions take place with the use of words, if your posts are clean, smooth and flowing I feel that in the ring so is your wrestler. Try to develop a sense of style you enjoy writing that flows with you whether it be a deep serious character, comedic, or all the above. Lastly, read or at least proof read what you write and take the time to think....If this were about someone elses character would I want to take the time to read it? Writing what people want to read goes a long way, for example if there are posts on the board from every active person here the first two I would read would be John and Trash because they make posts enjoyable and worth the while....
And lastly, have fun with what you write or you'll come to not enjoy what you're doing or this game as a whole.....
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Post by PHANTOM on Jul 12, 2011 10:11:18 GMT -5
Can u guys gice me feedback on my new character? Trash has ben given me some tips and thats how I came up with my new guy but can u guys suggest some thing? Dont just tell me u suck thoo
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Post by johnmwhite on Jul 12, 2011 11:58:07 GMT -5
Asking for feedback is a good step and I'm glad to hear Trash is helping you out. Your new character of Phantom is quite interesting, so far he has been mysterious without having ridiculous power. There's a fine line between being a strong character and being an overbearing character, and Draven leaned too heavily to the latter. That's not to say you can't have mystical powers or be able to play some mind games with people, but it's important to remember that when you control the narration, you write the actions and words of both yourself and your opponent, so you have a responsibility to portray your opponent fairly. For instance if I were facing Trash, I would not have a post where he suddenly swears like a sailor with every line and wobbles around the ring in a really clumsy manner, because in his posts I have observed his speech is more eloquent and his movement more careful. I might post that I outwit him, because it is in my character to be constantly thinking of how to twist a situation to my advantage, but I'd also have him get his licks in too, and sometimes come up with a plan the either I make fail myself or that has a clear loophole that my opponent can exploit in their next post.
Leaving hooks for your opponent to grab for their next post helps the flow of a match and builds a back and forth, cooperative effort. Even though you're competing against one another to try to make the most quality posts, you're not actually competing in terms of who can kick the most ass. Don't be afraid for your character to show a little vulnerability or have a weakness. Aaron Holiday's weakness is his hot temper and probably his liver. JMW's weakness is his bad knee and love of karaoke. Everybody's got something that can be exploited, but when it is exploited it is not a case of an opponent besting you, it's just something to add another layer and more drama to the match. Remember, a character does not have to be on top at the start and end of every single post to look good.
Also your font for in character posts is a little big and garish to me, maybe slightly smaller and more muted colours would be a good idea, but I have to admit this is a personal preference kind of thing and other players might not have a problem with the size of your writing. Trash keeps telling me my default blue font is way too tiny to read, though it looks fine on my screen (though my screen is only 7"). Anyone else have problems reading my font?
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Post by "Scarecrow" Jason Myst on Jul 12, 2011 18:23:47 GMT -5
well JMW I don't have a problem with your small blue fonts it doesn't hurt my eyes to read your posts.[/b][/size]
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Post by Brutal Mirror on Jul 12, 2011 20:39:23 GMT -5
Thanks again all for your feedback.
Aaron i understand what you mean about talent being something required with time. i will keep working on building myself up to be some thing fresh and new for the place.
John M. The Blue looks fine to me too.
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Post by Trash on Jul 12, 2011 21:03:03 GMT -5
Thanks for the compliments Holiday and JMW. Its very much appreciated...it's good to know that some people are reading and enjoying my posts.
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